Final informative essay final

Aaron Batista English 201

The main problem I had to focus on was my repetitive use of certain phrases or words. Sometimes I get lost in what I am trying to connect or say I just end up sounding like a broken record. I had to diversify my transitions in order to make everything flow smoother and not sound so redundant. Another thing was my tone was continuously shifting throughout the paper from formal to informal. I was describing things in a way I might say to someone I was familiar with, not with an objective audience. I was writing down what came into my head and not necessarily wording it in the way that I should.

I was also trying to get information from sources that were much more recent but as I said earlier these studies take time. A majority of the references that are used in each study are taken from studies done years and years before it. I just had to find informative, peer reviewed reports wherever available and most were done in the mid 2000’s. The new report gave more concrete information on water supplies per population, which gave a new perspective to the situation presented in the article. Overall I am happy with what I was able to find and produce in this paper.